Hello! After some minor debate as to which portion I should actually post, I decided to post a portion of backstory for one of my protagonists in my story, 44. If there's some sort of reaction, I'll likely post more.
Context of the story and character will be posted in the near future.
Spoiler
Lilienne: a circle of fire
An intense, scorching heat engulfed her thin, wry body. It was uncomfortable, so unlike the feelings she was familiar with. Yet she knew it did not touch her, for the heat was not yet dancing on her skin. The heat died away, slowly but surely, and the cool night air washed over her once more. Though it was gone, she was still not at ease; it felt as if the heat was merely waiting in the distance, ready to engulf her once more.
Gently, she opened her eyes to the world; her large, glassy golden eyes reflected the rosy light of the fire flickering against the walls of their small home. An elven man was trying to douse the flames with water, but persistently the fire returned, searing the blackened patch and setting it on fire again as quickly as it had gone.
She opened her mouth and tried to speak, but only a high-pitched squeak came out. The woman holding her in her arms was bobbing up and down in an attempt to try and hush her strange sounds. Even so, she cried and cried, afraid; for both herself and the beautiful yet frail woman in front of her.
“Hush, Lilienne.” she murmured before humming a quiet melody which was heaven to the young girl’s ears. “Lilienne, oh Lilienne. When will you cease to make such a racket?” she paused and tapped the child's forehead. "You must learn to hum, like I. Learn to carry the name of Songbird and make your ancestors proud of who you are."
She tried to imitate the heavenly voice she had heard before. A string of disjointed notes filled the air, shaky and off tune. The melody just barely resembled the one that she had heard from the second she was born, but the woman laughed softly. Her voice was as elegant and melodic as the young elf’s voice was disjointed and rough.
"See? You have the very blood of the Songbirds flowing in your veins, my dear. Your fortune will be plentiful until the very end, Lilie-" she cut off with a scream as an explosion blew aside the man who was fending off the flames. The woman watched, frozen to the spot as her husband’s limp body was cast aside idly, as if he was a rag doll. A loud crash as he was thrown outside jolted her from her trance.
The woman shrieked, and began to plead with the cloaked figure striding to her in a foreign tongue. The figure merely laughed and struck her across the face, a daunting blow that sent her crashing to the ground. The girl in her arms dropped onto the floor and she looked into the face of her mother's attacker, curious.
He grunted- the girl had managed to cling onto his shoe- and picked her up by the back of the collar to toss her aside. Before her vision faltered, all Lilienne could remember was a distinct, sharp pain in her head.
The man, having rendered the inhabitants of the cottage unconscious, retrieved a scroll from his cloak. Holding it open, he smirked and read aloud, “The town of Elluel shall fall, under the rule of the Black Mage.” The necromancer sneered as he stowed the scroll safely under his cloak before raising his staff with a gnarled, pale hand. With his other hand, he had retrieved a scrap of paper, and he prepared to light it up.
A figure appeared as if out of thin air, his arm blocking the staff. "Hold it, Trav." the man had looked around, but turned to face the unconscious child before turning back to the necromancer. "Do you have any idea how rare and precious elven children can be, especially to the Black Mage?"
"Not at all." the necromancer grinned a toothless grin. "Can I blow up this here house now?"
"She is of Songbird descent," he noted, completely ignoring his question and turning the child over. "She would be invaluable to the Black Mage should she be trained appropriately." He lifted the small body over his shoulder without another word, turning to leave.
"Whatever, do what you please." he scoffed. "If you get into strife I won't be involved with it!"
“I somehow doubt that, Travis.” the man glared at the necromancer. “On the contrary, did they ever teach you to treat your superiors with respect?”
Travis, having realized who he was, hastily bowed and muttered an apology. “Didn’t realize… Won’t happen again…”
“I’ll keep your word for that.” he started to walk away. "Feel free to destroy the rest."
The necromancer’s expression twisted into a grin. Once the man was out of sight, he raised his staff again and began to chant in a low voice, letting the rune markings expand beyond the realms of the small scrap of paper. The markings crawled onto the walls, growing brighter before an explosion blasted the necromancer’s hood back.
The explosion was only deafened by the crash of wood and stone. The dust settled, and fire roared into the night. Lilienne was roused by the unsettling noise. After a moment of realizing what was going on, she began to wail and kick about, screaming. She screamed for her deceased parents. She screamed at the forest, withering under flame. The fire danced vibrantly around her; the black night and the vivid red twisting and twirling in a demented dance.
The strange man carrying her merely chuckled quietly to himself as he unfurled his wings. His cloak fell to the ground in shreds. The elf’s struggles ceased when he held a hand to her forehead, and he drew his scepter. The fire burned merrily as he slowly ascended into the sky, the winds fanning the flames. He paused for a moment to admire the burning town, then disappeared into the night.
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Is there any one place where all the 44 stuff is gathered?
I, in my infinite wisdom, failed to notice that someone posted on my own thread :T Is there any notification thing that I can check on SP, or do I have to stalk all my threads hoping for a reply?
The 44 dropbox folder does, which I'll PM to you. It'll have all art stuff one by Jenny (some are SAI files though so I don't know what they are OTL), bannedstory/thoughts done by moo cow, ConCrit/Commentary from Cookie and the actual work/text references. A lot of the stuff is either alt universe or random scenarios that popped into my head that I deemed too good to waste/too persistent to forget. After reading them, you'll probably wonder why I even try...
Recently though, I've only been working on 44, as reflected by the dropbox timestamps.
I, in my infinite wisdom, failed to notice that someone posted on my own thread :T Is there any notification thing that I can check on SP, or do I have to stalk all my threads hoping for a reply?
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I, in my infinite wisdom, failed to notice that someone posted on my own thread :T Is there any notification thing that I can check on SP, or do I have to stalk all my threads hoping for a reply?
The 44 dropbox folder does, which I'll PM to you. It'll have all art stuff one by Jenny (some are SAI files though so I don't know what they are OTL), bannedstory/thoughts done by moo cow, ConCrit/Commentary from Cookie and the actual work/text references. A lot of the stuff is either alt universe or random scenarios that popped into my head that I deemed too good to waste/too persistent to forget. After reading them, you'll probably wonder why I even try...
Recently though, I've only been working on 44, as reflected by the dropbox timestamps.
I've been trying to dig up her artwork again, but I didn't have any keywords. This makes me very happy. And sad since I've kinda wasted my time.
Was this the folder that you put up before? 'Cause I knew you had Dropbox files. Since you wrote up that thing where Verge dies in his own little sub-plot. Hm.
I really haven't been following this at all since you broke like 10k or 30k words or something lul. ;__;
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I've been trying to dig up her artwork again, but I didn't have any keywords. This makes me very happy. And sad since I've kinda wasted my time.
Was this the folder that you put up before? 'Cause I knew you had Dropbox files. Since you wrote up that thing where Verge dies in his own little sub-plot. Hm.
I really haven't been following this at all since you broke like 10k or 30k words or something lul. ;__;
And ah, okay. You probably would've been able to find it in the original 44 thread, but it's buried deep within the durk subforum, so...
Yes, I've linked it a number of times before. I've kept it on dropbox since Jenny and moo cow moved onto the project :] Cookie joined a bit later.
I won't add you to the folder list, since you don't want to see how many ruddy times I update when working on the laptop, so just check back for timestamps to see what I've changed. I'll likely post about it on basil as well.
And it's okay Probably beyond 30k, since I hadn't established Verge as a character by that point... I think ._. I definitely didn't establish how he died at that point, that's for sure.
And ah, okay. You probably would've been able to find it in the original 44 thread, but it's buried deep within the durk subforum, so...
Yes, I've linked it a number of times before. I've kept it on dropbox since Jenny and moo cow moved onto the project :] Cookie joined a bit later.
I won't add you to the folder list, since you don't want to see how many ruddy times I update when working on the laptop, so just check back for timestamps to see what I've changed. I'll likely post about it on basil as well.
And it's okay Probably beyond 30k, since I hadn't established Verge as a character by that point... I think ._. I definitely didn't establish how he died at that point, that's for sure.
So it was that one. It's not buried that deep if you look at your thread history instead.
Maybe I do want to see, but the problem is more I have nothing to contribute. So yeah.
Apparently you made him blind and he dies fighting the spirit of Andras again... or something. And then his mask breaks.
Hmm, that probably had something to do with Deviched butchering my character's design.
So it was that one. It's not buried that deep if you look at your thread history instead.
Maybe I do want to see, but the problem is more I have nothing to contribute. So yeah.
Apparently you made him blind and he dies fighting the spirit of Andras again... or something. And then his mask breaks.
Hmm, that probably had something to do with Deviched butchering my character's design.
... I can't believe I didn't remember that. I looked into my posted threads to link attemborough, :T I'm slow
If you maintain discussion it's good enough :]
Hey hey, I didn't make him blind that late into the story D: But yeah, blind, dies fighting andras again, his mask shatters during the fight.
She kinda forced the design on, but I personally like Jenny's better .-. It's not the same if it only covers the eyes! there's a whole spoof centered around the fact that they don't know how he eats; they don't pay attention to him and suddenly the food's gone. If his mouth is exposed it completely beats the point >:[
I, in my infinite wisdom, failed to notice that someone posted on my own thread :T Is there any notification thing that I can check on SP, or do I have to stalk all my threads hoping for a reply?
adding to sapta, if you check these forums often (you lurker) there's also the "new posts" button in the top bar, Forum category, right below the homepage button, it will bring you to a list of all the threads with new posts that you haven't checked/that weren't there on your last visit.
adding to sapta, if you check these forums often (you lurker) there's also the "new posts" button in the top bar, Forum category, right below the homepage button, it will bring you to a list of all the threads with new posts that you haven't checked/that weren't there on your last visit.
Fortunately, I know of that button c: While my mass exploration of pressing random buttons to see what they did (unsurprisingly, they did as they were labelled, which is almost a shame), I came across that and now check it too often for my own good.
Also slightly off topic: haven't seen you in a while neither in-game nor on basil, how've you been?
Fortunately, I know of that button c: While my mass exploration of pressing random buttons to see what they did (unsurprisingly, they did as they were labelled, which is almost a shame), I came across that and now check it too often for my own good.
Also slightly off topic: haven't seen you in a while neither in-game nor on basil, how've you been?
there's skype for that :U and i've been pretty well, just... no reason at all to play maple, been playing another f2p (warframe) on my PS4 and it just is too nice, plus it has polearms! (and scythes @Corn; there's a steam version too) guide doesn't require any big changes so i haven't done anything about that, and barely any people ask anything on basil worth me posting/answering (the usual damage/equip threads) so i haven't been to active there, but i've been lurking hard don't misread that!
there's skype for that :U and i've been pretty well, just... no reason at all to play maple, been playing another f2p (warframe) on my PS4 and it just is too nice, plus it has polearms! (and scythes Corn; there's a steam version too) guide doesn't require any big changes so i haven't done anything about that, and barely any people ask anything on basil worth me posting/answering (the usual damage/equip threads) so i haven't been to active there, but i've been lurking hard don't misread that!
... Touche. I don't seem to ever know when you're on skype xD
And regarding lurking, I remember you telling me off for lurking because I should at least climb into someone's room to moo at them before leaving! >:C moo more
And yeah, okay. that's fair enough. I've been trying to keep active on the durk thread ('active' being hounding it every few hours), but it's moving slow.
... Touche. I don't seem to ever know when you're on skype xD
And regarding lurking, I remember you telling me off for lurking because I should at least climb into someone's room to moo at them before leaving! >:C moo more
And yeah, okay. that's fair enough. I've been trying to keep active on the durk thread ('active' being hounding it every few hours), but it's moving slow.
if i don't answer, i'm not on skype, i don't have any problems with being skyped at since it's on my laptop only, so no phone buzzing off during an important interview.
and well yea, just to know you're there, no need to moo if you're active with everyone somewhere else, of course those who aren't in said group will feel left out, thus moo more. i actually posted a day or two ago to show i'm still around!
been reading of your plusle-training shenanigans, i wish you luck, you'll need it in the dog eats dogcompetitive world of pokemon.
but that's a bit off topic for the thread, skype me anytime, and if i can't skype you at certain times, just leave that info in the message.
if i don't answer, i'm not on skype, i don't have any problems with being skyped at since it's on my laptop only, so no phone buzzing off during an important interview.
and well yea, just to know you're there, no need to moo if you're active with everyone somewhere else, of course those who aren't in said group will feel left out, thus moo more. i actually posted a day or two ago to show i'm still around!
been reading of your plusle-training shenanigans, i wish you luck, you'll need it in the dog eats dogcompetitive world of pokemon.
but that's a bit off topic for the thread, skype me anytime, and if i can't skype you at certain times, just leave that info in the message.
Ooh, right. I hadn't seen you post around recently, so I assumed you fell off the face of the planet :T
And I didn't see that post :U
Thank you :[ As a complete noob at most things competitive (who knew pokemon was so... complex), I've opted to start reading everything and anything about it haha
I'm up to breeding a zubat now. I managed to breed a 6IV pawniard so I'm already ecstatic :D ./still need to find one more poke
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