Looking for help in Art

[Nion]

Hey there, people of SP.
I was wondering whether you guys and gals are able to help me with this problem I have.
Currently, I'm trying to improve my artwork a lot in order to impress some people.

Is there anyone here able to critique a sample of my work?
I feel as if getting feedback would be able to help me a lot. :)


Here is the sample:
http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/f/20...on-d4ng2c2.jpg

[KajitiSouls]

No line between the left sleeve (from PoV) and the main body. Either that, or the length of the sleeve doesn't match up with the other sleeve.

There's a continuous line between the front pocket and the main body. That doesn't make sense to me.

Generally, the picture suffers from subtle splotchy coloring, sketchy lines, and bad proportioning.

My 2 cents.

[Nion]

No line between the left sleeve (from PoV) and the main body. Either that, or the length of the sleeve doesn't match up with the other sleeve.

There's a continuous line between the front pocket and the main body. That doesn't make sense to me.

Generally, the picture suffers from subtle splotchy coloring, sketchy lines, and bad proportioning.

My 2 cents.

Well I am a newbie when it comes to coloring. :P
And the continuous line is part of the design of the shirt; maybe I could have made it a bit more transparent.

Thank you for telling me these flaws.
I'll try my best to improve in it.

[raizoo]

Gotta start with the basics, bro.

The proportions are way off. To be fair, it's a bit of a difficult pose because he's mostly looking at you straight on. Is he sitting up straight? Is he leaning forward a bit? Is he hunching forward a lot? It's hard for me to tell. Foreshortening is tricky.

We can look at folds later. Can't make believable folds if what they're covering isn't believable.