2009-03-24, 01:37 AM
Three points.
One, you need to learn brevity. A full and complete condemnation of Nexon does not take this much space.
Two, don't use big words. The trick of good writing is to make your audience understand you. If you use no big words but your audience can read and respond, you've done more than sticking in a bunch of big words that make your piece incomprehensible except to literary buffs.
Three, and most importantly, you need to make your point clear. You get into "Nexon is bad" a lot, but never once do you go into specifics: what precisely has it done wrong, and why. We can to an extent deduce that its unscrupulous money-making policies are what you're talking about, (family ties being weakened, Golden Rule being avoided,) but this is little more than extrapolation because you are THAT unclear.
One, you need to learn brevity. A full and complete condemnation of Nexon does not take this much space.
Two, don't use big words. The trick of good writing is to make your audience understand you. If you use no big words but your audience can read and respond, you've done more than sticking in a bunch of big words that make your piece incomprehensible except to literary buffs.
Three, and most importantly, you need to make your point clear. You get into "Nexon is bad" a lot, but never once do you go into specifics: what precisely has it done wrong, and why. We can to an extent deduce that its unscrupulous money-making policies are what you're talking about, (family ties being weakened, Golden Rule being avoided,) but this is little more than extrapolation because you are THAT unclear.