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Requesting feedback - Mute - 2014-02-21

I put this rough draft up on my blog I recently discovered I had, and was hoping to get some feedback and constructive criticism, if that's ok.
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I kinda just went with what it was in my head, and didn't really look back. It's still in a rough-state, and im not sure if I want to go about tweaking it a bit. Just hoping to see what people think about it.
Thank you.


Requesting feedback - icephoenix21 - 2014-02-21

formatting into stanzas or whatnot would help ease the eyes.


Requesting feedback - Mute - 2014-02-21

icephoenix21 Wrote:formatting into stanzas or whatnot would help ease the eyes.

sorry, I just copy-pasted it from the blog. =P


Requesting feedback - KhainiWest - 2014-02-21

 My interpretation/suggestions

I'll probably do more later, but that's all I got for now