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  1. Monster Truck Tire Straight Male
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    Default Chew's tales corner.


    -Not my stories- (I only do the translations)

    The Chained Elephant


    Disclaimer:
    It would be awesome if anyone can put some feedback on this, mainly on grammar.
    Last edited by Chew; 2012-08-17 at 02:20 PM.

  2. Monster Truck Tire Straight Male
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    Default Re: Chew's tales corner.


    The man who seeked the truth

  3. Monster Truck Tire Straight Male
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    Default Re: Chew's tales corner.


    The clock stopped at 7 o'clock

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    What are these short pieces supposed to be? Are they supposed to be deep? I mean, I'm reading it and I can't even get into it because the hook is so weak. You/he/whatever put no detail, no pull, you just say the title and start off with "There was, there is, this is about". If he wants my feedback, he'd start it off better where the person understands the story without being told at the very first sentence

  5. Monster Truck Tire Straight Male
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    Default Re: Chew's tales corner.


    @KhainiWest;
    Just short stories I have read through some books. I just feel like sharing some of them and in the way practice my english (this is where I want some feedback).

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    Oh, well that could be written as "Sharing some of them to practice my english" or "Sharing some of them and in a way to practice my english".

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