My World.

[ImagineAll]

The page, painted with vibrant water colors, pastels, and light, displays the panorama of my life. The unusual hues of red and orange add vitality to the stage as they burn with their rebellious and smoldering shades. Bright and dangerous yellows embody creativity as the greens dance across the paper, sharing their adventurous personalities. Profound arrangements of peaceful blues enrapture every eye that views the piece, and the subtle traces of purple artistically brighten the sheet with their intelligent and luxurious shadows.

My world is very colorful.

It wasn’t always that way. After years of attending the same school, following the same routine, and wearing the same uniform; I found myself in a place where only black and white existed. Shades of gray tinted each aspect of my life, leaving no room for creativity or color.

I found myself struggling to break free from the normalness of my daily existence, searching for something interesting, new, and exciting; something that would set me apart from the person I was and the person I wanted to become; something that would color my world. I began to involve myself in various activities at school; I signed up for more interesting classes than the ones I was required to take freshman year; and I befriended out of the ordinary and somewhat odd people. Each new motion painted a fresh vivid color onto my once blank canvas.

Branching out, I began to experience the different features time has to offer, especially when the life I was living didn’t prove to be anything drastically exciting. Now I find myself running from place to place with a new vitality, not necessarily running so fast that I miss the details of what I’m passing by, but moving just fast enough so the colors blur and a spectrum results. I don’t want to stop. I want to continue splattering new colors on my palette of life until there’s no room for more. I’m ready to move on.

One of my personal essays for the UCLA film school that's due on Wednesday of next week. Any critiques/suggestions?

[Kurtle]

Put a period after "My world is very colorful".

[ImagineAll]

Put a period after "My world is very colorful".

I accidentally deleted it when I copied this out of the word document and it removed all of my paragraph spacing.

[Panacea]

After years of attending the same school, following the same routine, and wearing the same uniform, I found myself in a place where only black and white existed;

Switched the comma and semicolon.

I began to involve myself in various activities at school; I signed up for more interesting classes than the ones I was required to take freshman year; and I befriended out of the ordinary and somewhat odd people.

I feel like you're overusing the semicolon. Replace the first one with a regular colon, then replace the second with a comma? You could insert one before the next sentence, though.

As a personal essay, I feel like it's lacking something, but I'm not quite sure I can put it into words. What's the maximum length, and how long is it now?