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xAyakoCx
2010-05-31, 07:48 PM
"IT WAS STRANGE!!! NO MORE!!! NEVER AGAIN!!!"

★━━PART ①━━★
【夜】Night. Ayako and Sasamee are two friends who like to stay close together when they are exploring. They are walking together in the bright night of New Leaf City. It was busy, neon signs shone on the radiant skin of the Maplers that came to train, the potion shop was busy. "Yes, I can sell you these for that price!" beamed Potion Seller Miki. Sasamee went to ask Mani if there are any recommended hairstyles. "Oh, Princess Warrior is an adorable hairstyle, girllll..." Mani purred. "When you have NX, buy that coupon, get the hair." Sasamee gulped, nodded and walked out of the shop. Ayako fixed her kimono (in the middle of the street!!!) and sighed. "Hey~!" someone shouted to Ayako, "Aren't you the one whose Deadly Fin I sold to?! It's me, Dark!" Ayako nodded a little. "Well, yeah I did." she replied. "By the way, I like your hair so much it reminds me of the guy who is giving kisses to females. In that tower there," said Dark. Ayako paused.
"What?" she asked.
"That guy John?" Dark replied, "He's going to stay with anybody who likes him the most~!" Dark laughed.
"Oh..." whispered Ayako. She ran to Bigger Ben.
"HEY, AYAAAAAA!!!" squeaked Sasamee, "Where you going?"
"FREE. KISSES. AT. BIGGER. BEN!!!" panted Ayako.
She ran up the tower, went inside then ran down the stairs. There was a line of people (half are guys dresses as females or the females hadn't shaved. "They look ugly..." whispered Sasamee.
"OH MY... OH..." a masculine voice called.
Ayako froze in shock. Right behind her, was a handsome figure. "I think we have a winner..." the voice whispered.
Ayako smiled. "Uwaaaaaaahhhh!" she squealed, "Sasamee did you hear that?!"
"Sasamee is pleased to seeeee!" Sasamee's eyes glittered in her eyes' language. Ayako knew Sasamee had a lucky friend.
"I'm going to sleep at your house tonight," the voice whispered to Ayako.
"Are you serious?" Ayako cried in happiness. She turned around. She squealed like a girl who had been asked to get married. "JOHNNNNNNNNNN~~~!!!"
Ayako started twitching... "It's you..." Then she fainted.

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"Okay, Ayako, WHO THE HECK IS THIS?!" her sister Spuna questioned, dumping water on her face.
The caretaker (the girl who made Ayako and her sisters and Sasamee, who is an imaginary MS char) walked in after calling her best friend Erich. "LUCKY!!!" shouted Caretaker, "Congrats Ayako!! Or should I say... AYABA!!"
"Uwaaaah, Goshuusin!" Ayako wailed, "Not infront of Johnny here!"
"Okay, Ayako, very funny," sighed Caretaker, f7ing, "That's an NPC and you know it."
"Oh, right..." yawned Ayako. Her voice suddenly broke off and she is hearing somebody saying "WAKE UP".

Ayako woke up.
"It was a dream..." ...

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Ayako looked out of her hotel window in NLC. She could see cars and maplers. It was time for school. Ayako got into her favourite clothes and walked out of the appartment. "WAIT!!!" her sister Sana called, running out of the lobby. "YOU FORGOT TO EAT YOUR BREAKFAST." Ayako laughed at Sana. Then she realised she wasn't tasting anything. "MY COOKIES!!!" Ayako gasped. She ran to her room and grabbed the box of cookies, then she grabbed her toast, ate it, then speeded up to the school building.

"Ayako!" Sasamee greeted, "How are you?"
"Fine," yawned Ayako, "Had this wierd dream last night."
"What was the dream about, Ayas?" asked Sasamee.
"I dated an NPC," wailed Ayako, "It was strange!!! NO MORE!!! NEVER AGAIN!!!"
Ayako fiercly banged her desk, crying. "I AM NOT ALLOWED TO THINK OF HIM ANYMORE!!! I HAVE TO HELP CARETAKER WITH HER LOVE WITH HER AMERICAN LOVER!!"
Pupils laughed. Then Ayako remembered that the NPC was coming to the school.
"No..." whispered Ayako. She ran out of the classroom and into the bathroom. She cried like a mad woman.
"Hey..." a voice called.
"What is it, Kaori?" sighed Ayako.
"Problems?" Kaori asked.
"Yeah, it's makin' me crazy..." Ayako cried, "I can't take this love anymore!"
"Well, you know what will make you feel better?"
"What?"
"Put these on..."

Ayako changed out of her clothes and into what is a Short Kimono Dress, a hairband, some Japanese style shoes and a lollipop to hold if she gets scared. "You used to like him, didn't you?" Kaori asked.
"Oh yes..." replied Ayako, with a tear running down her face.
"Hold the lollipop and be calm..." Kaori whispered.
"OK..."

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"CLAAAAAAASSSSSSSSEEEEEEEE" the teacher screamed, "ALL OF YOU BEHOLD!!!"
The class started mumbling to each other. "What?" someone asked.
"YOU DON'T REMEMBER?!" the teacher screamed.
"Ohhh!!!" the class droned.
Kaori held Ayako's hand. "Don't worry, Ayako." she whispered, "You'll be fine."
Soon John walked into the room.
"That's the guy I was talking about," whispered Ayako to Kaori.
The teacher rambled about John, then he made his introduction. Ayako looked pale. She couldn't move out of her seat. Not even one inch. She was still holding Kaori's hand.
"Hello? What do we have here?" John smiled, "A girl with similar hair as I? That's nice." He looked directly at Ayako. Her lips started trembling. Her cheeks were rose-red. Her eyes glittered as stars in the sky. She was still frozen but her face wasn't. She said "Hi".
"Hey, are you alright?" John asked.
"Yeah?" whispered Ayako in reply.
Kaori felt sorry for Ayako. She couldn't say anything rude.
Ayako started talking in general. Wierd.
3 minutes later... "Okay, I'll talk to you after I tell the class about what I discovered, okay?" John said.
Ayako nodded. She then listened to John all the time.
Kaori looked as if she wanted to ask Ayako a question. But Ayako's eyes were focused on the man.

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End of part one!

If you want MOAR, tell me what you think will happen in the next part.
If I think it's that great, I'll include it. :shine:

Bye!
*P.S. That's one hour typing and thinking*

Will
2010-05-31, 08:19 PM
It's difficult to really tell whats going on.
Girl has a crush on john Barricade? and he goes to her school?..
Confusing, but if this is like your first major story, it's not too bad.
I'll wait to see if this moves forward before really judging it.

TøbiasBlack
2010-05-31, 09:25 PM
It's difficult to really tell whats going on.
Girl has a crush on john Barricade? and he goes to her school?..
Confusing, but if this is like your first major story, it's not too bad.
I'll wait to see if this moves forward before really judging it.

if it is to it'll be somewhere other than SP.

Will
2010-05-31, 11:03 PM
if it is to it'll be somewhere other than SP.
Why?
Because SP might shut down?
Shouldn't take 15 days to write part 2 to something like this.

xAyakoCx
2010-06-01, 03:35 AM
Yes people, this story is POMUHGRANATE.

Pikamemnon
2010-06-01, 06:10 AM
I'm sorta torn between 2 directions. We could use some more romantic comedies around here but then again I also think it would work well if u added some zombies.

Will
2010-06-06, 11:52 PM
^No.

And yeah, I guess this story is sh'it.
Unless you can shape it up in part 2, quit or start anew.